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Huh? What's this?
That's a like.
I've been really enjoying these, they're fun. You got that classic flash style with some real goofy humor and I'm about it. Keep it up!
There are parts of this to which I would say "admirable effort!" Other parts, however, made it frankly very difficult to sit through. I did sit through them though, on account of the fact that I think there is potential here that just needs to be developed and properly utilized.
First up, get rid of the "channel intro" sequence. Just scrap the whole thing, and go straight into the video instead. It's the most run-of-the-mill, trashy YouTube-laden thing you could possibly do. And on top of that, it clashes with the actual video in a just miserable way. It's dull, it's annoying, and it's entirely unnecessary. You don't wanna be that person.
My next biggest complaint about this is that there are entire MINUTES of this video where not a single thing happens on screen and we (the audience) are left with nothing but the beat and a still-frame. I genuinely do not understand why you didn't take those opportunities to put more animation in! Add some cool stuff going on during those parts, maybe some animation of Cuphead fighting enemies, or maybe some well-drawn stills that break the monotony, or even just... anything! Anything at all would have been better than staring at those single, unmoving frames waiting for that part of the beat to end and the next verse to arrive.
After that, we need to address the Autotune... The absolutely horrendous Autotune. Look, I understand using heavy Autotune for stylistic purposes, and believe that it can but done to good effect, but in all honesty, this ain't it. It doesn't even sound like the Autotune is set to the same key that the song is in. It's just all over the place. If you want to use heavy autotune to achieve a certain sound, I say absolutely go for it, but you MUST do it right.
While we're on the note of the audio, the vocals are also very poorly mixed. I can't say for sure, but it seems to me like you just downloaded a song and recorded your vocals over it (and I suspect you did something similar with your "channel intro"). Which isn't necessarily a bad thing if you give credit and have permission to do it, but if you're going to do it, you still need to mix your vocals properly. They are way too loud in comparison to the instrumental.
Now I've listed my biggest complaints, I'll tell you why I say the attempt is admirable. For one thing, I don't think that this video was inherently ill-conceived. The lyrics are adequate and do a good job of conveying the Cuphead story-line in a way that I think suffices as an homage to the game (which I would say is a very good game and totally deserving of fan art such as animated music videos), but if you're going to do something like this again I really think you need to hold yourself to a higher caliber. You show a lot of promise here, it just seems like you've only put in the bare minimum amount of effort to make the video exist, instead of putting in the extra work to make the video good. I truly believe that you can make something better than this, and you really have the potential to make good animations, you just really need to self-criticize your work before deciding it's done, and ask yourself "what can I do to make this better before I upload it to a place like Newgrounds?"
I wish you good luck going forward, I hope you keep at it. I know you can make something awesome if you really apply yourself.
Daaaamn the first push had me laughing and this kept up the humor the whole way through. A lot of really unexpected twists in there that made for some excellent comedy. I love the whole Paul-being-sexually-attracted-to-icecream concept. My favorite joke was probably the rice making birds blow up bit. The animation itself had some nice high points to it, I thought the part where Paul punches the elephant was really well done. Some parts I think the animation could use some spicing-up too, like when Paul walks away from the ice cream stand, the walk cycle could be a little flashier. This was an awesome short, you did a really good job. Hope we see a lot more from ya before the year is out!
Thanks man! Glad you enjoyed it! I agree with the few touch up suggestions and yeah haha those birds are a riot. And I'll do my best to drop a few more before the year ends. Cheers bud!
I didn't think the first one could be beat. I thought you had made the single greatest animation that was ever or could ever be made... But no. You did it. You shattered all possible caps on quality to create the masterpiece of masterpieces. No joke here, I think this is one of my favorite videos I've ever seen in my life.
Woooooah that loop is incredible! This is some really impressive work. Always loved your toons but this is really some next level stuff. Awesome job with everything, character animation and lip syncing is all on point, and the character designs are fun. I love this!
That was really damn good. I can definitely appreciate all of the effort that went in to the animation in this piece. The character rotating, the fbf lip syncing, the various angles, it's all done with such a lovely attention to detail, and turned out brilliantly. This was also very easy to keep watching, never felt bored for a minute. The one issue I think could use some improvement is just the audio quality, seems like a better microphone might do you some good. But even then, doesn't detract enough for me to drop this even half a star. Really impressive work, great job!
I promise to never sleep again. I made a serious mistake and watched this at age 13, I should have listened, but now I will never recover.
I love this so much. The animation style and the effects that are going on are exactly what I like to see. The writing is witty and enjoyable, though the subtitles may be a little bit on the fast side. I really love the character designs, and the world has definitely got my interest. I can't wait to see where you take this. Keep up the good work!
Woah. I clicked expecting a short little dumb joke kind of thing, but what I got was an absolute wild ride from start to finish. I loved every second of this. The ending genuinely made me jump from my seat and shout, I wouldn't have ever seen that coming. You did a really awesome job with this. Love the goofy art style, and the sound was pulled off brilliantly. Excellent work.
Co-host of A Couple of Crickets Podcast, and Even More Sound Podcast; creator of FlowDownStream; animator; """musician"""; university dropout
Concordia University, Montreal
Joined on 8/18/15