I really like this a lot, but I have this overarching feeling that I have actually felt with a number of animations of Newgrounds recently, though this is the first time I've said it out in the open. Though I love this style, I really think you need to do more to separate yourself from pilotredsun. Sure, you added a factor not all-to-prevalent (although occasionally present) in prs videos, that element being harsh noise (something I personally am in favour of, but is not likely to win you many praises from all too many people). Over all, what I'll say is that this is going in a very good direction, it just really needs something more to make it exceptionally unique, and then I think you'll be able to form some masterpieces.
Good luck going forward, I hope to see more from ya!