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I'll be honest - I feel like this could use a lot of work, BUT I must say I find it very endearing. It reminds me a lot of the kind of stuff I used to make way back in the day (albeit better than my old stuff), and I also feel like there is a TON of potential going on here.
I enjoyed the writing, for the most part. Some things felt like in-jokes that I didn't really get (like the lines at the beginning about importing from the colour universe), but other things I thought were very well done, like the twist ending about the arcade. I think this could use a few more one-liners here and there, plus some more subversions-of-expectation, like what you did with the twist.
The title card was a nice touch, but it has a long way to go as far as quality is concerned, in my opinion. It needs to be more interesting to look at, especially in terms of texture. If you want my recommendation, I'd say take a look at some of the title cards from the episodes of the old show Ed, Edd, and Eddy. They were absolutely brilliant, and I think it's the kind of thing you're trying to emulate here. Study them closely, but continue to imbue your own style, and I think you'll go far with it.
The art style is actually sort of nice, I like the not-so-smooth lines you're putting to use, but again, I think it needs some work. For one thing, the lip-syncing is lazy. I encourage you to look up some lip-syncing animation tutorials to try to get a feel for how you could take it from looking mediocre to looking really good (individual mouth shapes for each phoneme, things like that).
The character design is nice enough, I wouldn't change it too much personally, aside from making sure that you make the animations for them as smooth as possible.
I like the sprite work.
Last thing I take issue with here is the credits in your description. I'm assuming InkNimations is "Matt", although I could be wrong it may be "Scratch", regardless, the list "x by me, y by me, z by me" is superfluous and borderline annoying. It's been done a million times before, and at best it comes off as somewhat narcissistic. If you absolutely MUST list off all the things you did for the piece, do it in the form of "x, y, and z by me", otherwise, just use the Newgrounds credit system, like you did anyway.
Overall, I actually liked this. I think y'all did really well, and I encourage you to continue. Just make sure you put as much effort into it as possible to keep the quality as high as you can, and I think you can really go places with this. Good luck, much love, and I hope to see more from you in the future! :)

Rounded to 3 stars for judgement.

alexparr responds:

Wow, that's a deep review.

For the writing, it was all Matt. (who is InkNimations, and Scratch is just the animation program I used.)

I never watched Ed, Edd and Eddy, but i'll try to do so. There's no Lip Syncing because it would take a LOT of work in order to make it sync.

Sorry if the x by me, y by me, etc, etc is annoying. I'll fix it next episode!

Wow is this me? I think this might be me.

littlbox responds:

The story, all names, characters, and incidents portrayed in this production are fictitious. No identification with actual persons (living or deceased), places, buildings, and products is intended or should be inferred. No person or entity associated with this film received payment or anything of value, or entered into any agreement, in connection with the depiction of tobacco products. No animals were harmed in the making of this motion picture. Several pieces of sanity broke into a million tiny pieces that have to be put back together again when all you have is duct tape. So you take the duct tape and wrap it around your stringy head and press until it all caves in and you fall to the ground for the last time this week.

tl;dr Sure. Why not? :)

Didn't even notice this was you until I came down to review, but it definitely has your style! Really like the background in this one, the voice acting is great, and it's funny, so well done :)

littlbox responds:

Wow! Thanks, man. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D

Super cool, but it's way too gosh darn short. I'd love to see some more work like this, really dig the style.

MrSeaks responds:

Thanks man, it was for a uni assignment, 10 seconds was max length

This is excellent! I love it, the animation in this one looks so good. Nice work :)

This is excellent. Love the humour and the art style. Instant classic.

This is the worst thing I've ever seen in my life :(
R.I.P Rahul, I'll never forget you.

Oh my lord, this is fantastic. I find the art style so endearing, I love that effect with the mouths, and the joke caught me off guard and gave me a good laugh. Great work :)

This is really nice! There's so much depth to it, and I find it really beautiful in that way. The combination of the dreamy surreal moments and the more somber "down to earth" parts (so to speak) is intriguing, and I think it supports that premise well. Excellent work :)

This is great, I love the art style, and it's all animated so nicely. All the jokes were on point, I got a few good laughs out of this. Well done.

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